Susan asks…
What do you Think of my Prologue?
Its to my short story comic book in English Class:
A winter night, it’s a dark gloomy setting in the city that has very little light to start with. The air is moist, from the cold inner city harbor, a tourist attraction by day killer by night, 30 miles off there is a small town boarding this harsh city, Stark Town. In this town walks a young man coming from working a 14 hour shift at a fast food restaurant. Tried and alone he walks past unlit homes with nothing more than Halloween décor to keep him company. The streets empty, occupied only by brown and orange leaves and rainy roads. He stares up at the moon with a look of despair. “My only friend,” mumbles the loner. He walks with no real destination, just somewhere for him to rest for a little, but not a home. He arrives at a house walks towards a gate that opens to a backyard filled with shadows from the moonlight. Down a few steps he unlocks the door and lies on an old mattress on the floor, dropping like a rock from a cliff. News reports from an old T.V. up stairs are the only noises to be heard. He rests……for now…..for a little.
“BERP” “BERP” He wakes in the cold and dark basement. Half asleep he replaces his frigid and wet clothes, puts on his black thick under riding pants that reach his small waist, and slips on his golden colored boots that reach his knees. He wears his golden, cold weather athletic shirt with long black sleeves covering his lean torso. He grabs his long golden gloves that end at the tip of his elbows. He attaches his sliver belt to his waist; finally he reaches for a blank and bland gold mask with only one feature that illuminates his way, white soul piercing eyes. He covers his face, locks the door, and heads into the young night. The lonely moon glares and prays that his only friend, come back.
Any constructive criticism would be appreciated
admin answers:
It doesn’t really fill the function of a prologue.It doesn’t explain anything and it introduces nothing.
It is filled with redundancies, and I found it really boring to read.
Mary asks…
What do you think of this idea for a horror movie?
I had an idea of a horror movie and I want to write it into a script and hopefully get it to become an actual movie, or a book, Im new to writing, and please don’t think im a psycho. I still didn’t figure out a title but this is what I thought the title should be:
The Forced
It is about a ten year old child who lives in an abusive family situation, and in this household, his mom yells at him, his dad is nicer to him, but only acts mean around the mother because he is a bit afraid of his wife, and his little sister always crys too much. One evening the father left “To go to work” when in actuality he was having an affair with a neighbor because of his fear with his actual wife. He leaves, driving the car down the road, and then returning to the neighbors house and parks the car in the neighbors garage. Then steps into the house to begin having sex with her. Moments before, the child was watching the window and saw his father park the car in the garage, he then went to his room to play his games, when his mother entered and told him “I said no games, WHY DON”T YOU EVER LISTEN TO ME!!!” The boy turns of his video games, while in the background his little sister is crying “Huh! TALK YOU LITTLE SH*T!” Then the mother slaps the child, the child becomes angered, and looks at the mother, the mother leaves and the boy goes to the kitchen while his mom was texting on her phone also in the kitchen, the boy grabs his orange demon mask that was left there, put it on, opened the cabinet, and took out a large knife, he held the blade in his hands to observe it, then lifted it in the air, and began to stab his mom in the back of her head, while her lifeless body was laying on the floor, shaking and trenbling. Blood spilled everywhere, including on the baby girl. The boy then walks by the girl without noticing her, exiting the house. He then knocks forcebly on the door of his neighbor’s house 3 times, then knocks again 3 times. Then the neighbor opened the door, she was smoking and she was dressed in loungerie, she looked at him and asked “is it Halloween already” He then observes her stomech and could smell the filth in the air, he then stabbed her repeadidly in the stomach, exactly where a baby would have been created, he then tosses her body to the ground, and looks up to see his father in his underwear sitting on her filthy couch, he looks at him and recognizes him imedietly, and then begins to scream. (this is a part where the camera would be panning out of the house) The boy returns to his home, and then looks at his baby sister, holds her, takes her out of the house just to hold her in his bloody hands and begins to say in a whorse voice “its ok now, the bad people are gone.” Then he looks to the sky as it begins to rain, then lowers his head and starts to sing “rock aby baby on the tree top, when the wind blows the craddle will rock…” He then hears a siren whailing and police cars begin to swarm him, he is consumed by the lights from the cars, and then he raises the knife by accident and one cop fired at him, he shot him in the shoulder, thankfuly it didn’t hit any bone near his shoulder. The boy fell down and was soon rushed to a hospital, there when he was healed up he was sent to a police station for questioning, he never answered any of their questions, after that he was rushed to a sanitarium where he was kept there for 23 years. During his time there, he bagan to scream and yell alot, and describe to the employees nightmares hes been having of a house, and the strangest of all was of this man with an orange demon face, walking silently, and unemotional. One night he was given the liberty to walk around the garden, there he found a gardener behind a restroom, murdered him by snaping his neck in two and stole his machete, he hid the machete under his bathrobe which was the only thing he had to wear, when he came back to the guards, he violently took out the machete and slashed at them, one by one, with anger in each of his swings. Once all were murdered, he took the machete, began to lick all of the blood off of it, and tucked it back into his robe, he then tool one of the guard’s shotgun and decided to use it, he blew away 3 guards, and shot one of them in the head, and because of the shotgun’s power that guards head blew away like a watermelon pumped with too much air. When he escaped he returned to the place of his first murders, his house. When he returned he found a family in there, he then knocked forcebly on the door 3 times, and waited as soon as someone opened, it was an old woman, who was shocked by his appearence, and as soon as she opened the door the machete’s blad went through her stomach and he forced it up with a mighty swing until the woman was sliced in the middle and both halfs split down and the corpse fell down revealing the other family members, he murdered them all unemotionally, and buried
admin answers:
What a crap movie!
This isn’t horror at all. This is just a sick psychological movie. Do people these days don’t know the difference between thriller/suspense and horror? Duuhhh…
Michael asks…
Help on overanalyzing?
I’ve had this for as long as I can remember. My first solid memory of this is when I was 6 years old crying in bed about something that happens and it just felt unreasoned (my dads an alcoholic) and i cursed at God. I was so scared after that I would go to hell and started thinking it through and by the end of the night I became agnostic. Since then I’ve always been analytical and introverted. Sorry if this is hard to understand but at the moment im erratic and depressed..
Anyways
Since high school ended and most of my closet friends moved away I’m meeting new people but I cant be myself around them. Its like im wearing The Mask like jim carey. but its more complex then that.. Right now im fine, around a friend i find neutral im fine, if im with a friend who I think is ‘cool'(more cool then i am) i change a bit to bump myself up kinda. Like my friend yannick I always feel like i have to be just as cool as him. I envy those people who just dont give a shit about that kind of stuff.
Last night at a halloween party I went to where i didn’t know many people, i acted like a goof. The whole pressure the event was giving me totally shut of my normal behavior and I became really fake, I must have sounded like a tard but I couldn’t help it. At the sametime i was like MAN JUST BE NORMAL.
Im a regular joe, in high school i had friends from all over the place, stoners, goths, anime kids, popular kids, and people always tell me i have a great personality, BUT I have this stupid rank system in my head thats been there forever and its a totally unnessesary part of me, When im getting baked with even close friends(I smoke weed for fun, but also sometimes to help understand myself) sometimes I feel so wierd, like im acting f**ed, sounding f**ed, trying to hard to be cool, something like that. And sometimes i asked them am i “—” and everytime they’re like No your being completely normal. Or wouldnt be able tell im stoned at all, so i dont get why I feel that way! but this is telling me that this problem is deep-seeded, a very internal problem. Its unlikely i can afford to see a councellor anytime soon. I really hope someone out there understands where im coming from..
admin answers:
Guys are less willing/able to make phone calls to counselors.
However, logically, it is in your better interest to make a call to some licensed counselors, and obtain free advice.
1-800-525-LOVE 24/7 http://www.klove.com
Your ranking/overanalyzing is symptomatic of a condition well-treated by Dr. Carol Dweck, a professor of clinical psychology at Stanford.
Her book is called “Mindset.”
You might also appreciate “They Call Me Coach,” John Wooden, and
“Emotions,” Marilyn C. Barrick, Ph.D.
Paul asks…
Useless Facts 7?
60. If you put a drop of liquor on a scorpion, it will instantly go mad and sting itself to death.
61. Bruce Lee was so fast that they had to slow the film down so you could see his moves.
62. The largest amount of money you can have without having change for a dollar is $1.19 (3 quarters, 4 dimes, and 4 pennies cannot be divided into a dollar).
63. The first CD pressed in the US was Bruce Springsteen’s “Born in the USA”.
64. IBM’s motto is “Think”. Apple later made their motto “Think different”.
65. The mask used by Michael Myers in the original “Halloween” was actually a Captain Kirk mask painted white, due to low budget.
66. The original name for butterfly was flutterby.
67. The phrase “rule of thumb” is derived from an old English law, which stated that you couldn’t beat your wife with anything wider than your thumb.
68. One in fourteen women in America is a natural blonde. Only one in sixteen men is.
69. The Olympic was the sister ship of the Titanic.
admin answers:
Cool facts! :) Like all of them.. :)
Helen asks…
Buy or Sell: 3 of the top 15 matches of the last 30 years involve Mitsuharu Misawa?
This is completely subjective, but there is NO DOUBT that no one has the volume of diversified classics be it tag team, 6 man Misawa and CO vs Jumbo and CO or a legion of singles matches, as Misawa who as I wrote my reasons for before my question got deleted, is the greatest in ring performer of all time. Anyway, the high spots of Misawa’s greatest matches are:
Kawada vs Misawa Triple Crown 1994: Emotional brilliantly long and intense psychological match that some consider the greatest match of all time, plus you can just SEE the determination in Kawada’s style in the match, plus the match is brilliant upon building off of other matches where Kawada hurt his knee
Kobashi vs Misawa 1998 10/30: Some also consider this the greatest match of all time
The 1995 tag team classic that builds off of the 1992 one, and is considered the best tag match of all time (Misawa Kobashi/Taue Kawada)
Jumbo Tsura/ Mitsuharu Misawa 1990 : The best passing of the torch match bar none and wonderful storytelling as Misawa is great in making a now older and slower Jumbo look like he can still be a threat
Of course, with the Taker/Michaels wrestlemania matches, Guerrero/Malenko, Angle/Benoit RR 2003, Flair/Funk I quit match, Austin/Hart WM 13 match, Bret vs Owen WM 10, , Liger/Sano 1989, Flair/Steamboat trilogy, Punk vs Joe 2, Lynn/RVD, Savage/Steamboat WM 3, the 2 final matches of the 1994 Super J Cup, Daniels/Styles/Samoa Joe, Austin Rock at WM 17, Guerrero V Mysterio 1997 Halloween Havoc, Hart/Bulldog at Summerslam 1992, The Dynamite Kid/Tiger Mask 1 matches, Kobashi/Akyama last encounter, and Hart/Michaels Iron man match WM 12 among many others, there is stiff competition for the top 15 matches of the last 30 years title, so I ask buy or sell the question!
admin answers:
Definilely buy, Misawa had 24 five stars matches and 5 match of the year.
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